another stupid tragedy

[brokenlover]

breathing is not an option anymore
it serves me no purpose to store
to break like glass my ties with the world
all they see is an uncertain girl
slicing away at unsatisfied wounds
to end life would be to soon
a darkened corner in a cold room
upon this sweet liquid i do swoon
torture does run and fall in my veins
allowing more cutting, the pleasure i gain
stinging with anguish at my newly released palat
to paint away my sadness
this is my ballad
uncontrollable urges to fall away so deep
darkness consumes me
blood i weep
tragedy and lonliness
around every corner
how sad they will be those who adored her
the prickeling pleasure of a new blade befriended
steel to skin
one more pain ended

[brokenlover]

please write tell me what you think

[brokenlover]

im just like some other people here
i get no feedback and its pissing me off
grrr people cant just stop and tell me what they think grrrrrrr
i need orange juice

[Jaysie]

I had a friend who did that through high school. It's not that uncommon, but I still find it unfathomable. It's hard to imagine how much pain an individual must be enduring, that physical pain feels better. This piece really makes you think, and more than that it makes you feel. Wonderful job, especially with such a difficult topic.

As far as getting your writing commented on: be patient. We can't all be here everyday, but when we're here we do read and offer our opinions. However, I believe more people post to the All Types board than the Teen Poetry board. Perhaps the comments would accumulate quicker there. Also, I'd suggest making your presence here known: go introduce yourself, offer your own opinions...

Anyway, this was a fantastic read. It's really moving. I hope to read more from you soon.

-Jaysie

[brokenlover]

thankyou for your comments it means alot to know what people think
it is a hard topic to deal with for me
it has become the new fad in my school you know just for attention
ive been doin it since i was eight it sucks when people exploit depression just to be seen
when people really do have problems

[Dead Man Walking]

I really liked this one. I enjoyed reading it. It showed a great deal of teenage attitude...grea job, Tj

[brokenlover]

thanks glad you likes it

[xxbreathlessx]

wow tht was good and i understand where ur coming from, but its still unhealthy to cut and u should get some help with tht cuz other things will get better too, but for the writing i luved it , it was so good!