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Mar 7, 2004 20:04:49 GMT -5
Post by TK on Mar 7, 2004 20:04:49 GMT -5
Never have i felt this way
Surrounded by pain and dismay
tho your lies may have kept me from seeing the truth
I always knew it was too good to be true
Its over now, and i have one regret
It should have lasted longer i'll tell you again
I wish you were mine
So I can hug you again
Then slap you and say goodbye
to you and your gang
Now that you understand my feelings for you
I've gotta go hurt you
Make you feel like I do.
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tk4ever
still rather new
I'm the ruler of the underworld, yet a slave to modern society.
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Mar 8, 2004 18:36:26 GMT -5
Post by tk4ever on Mar 8, 2004 18:36:26 GMT -5
hey! ;D thats my poem, hope you like it!!! Its my first one to post on a site and so yea....I NEED feedback..... biya ;D  ;D |
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Mar 10, 2004 10:55:39 GMT -5
Post by EllenMitchells on Mar 10, 2004 10:55:39 GMT -5
its very powerful but it doesnt flow very well does it i liked it but it could be inproved
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Mar 11, 2004 17:00:29 GMT -5
Post by ~Erosion of the physco mind~ on Mar 11, 2004 17:00:29 GMT -5
hahahahahha i loved ur poem....don't care about the flow!!!!! the wordz...i can sooooo totally relate to u!!!! O.M.G!!!! love love love love love the poem!!!!!!!!!! haha!!!!
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tk4ever
still rather new
I'm the ruler of the underworld, yet a slave to modern society.
Posts: 28
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Mar 11, 2004 18:30:32 GMT -5
Post by tk4ever on Mar 11, 2004 18:30:32 GMT -5
thankyou....i just wrote it cause I was pissed off.....really pissed off.......hey atleast some1 likes it,.
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Mar 12, 2004 16:23:19 GMT -5
Post by ~Erosion of the physco mind~ on Mar 12, 2004 16:23:19 GMT -5
how could i like....not like it??? it makes total since, and i can totallu realate!!!!!!!!  hehe |
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tk4ever
still rather new
I'm the ruler of the underworld, yet a slave to modern society.
Posts: 28
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Mar 17, 2004 11:31:49 GMT -5
Post by tk4ever on Mar 17, 2004 11:31:49 GMT -5
;D
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XtearsX
newbie
Its funny how a heart is two tear drops upside down...
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Jun 7, 2004 13:35:24 GMT -5
Post by XtearsX on Jun 7, 2004 13:35:24 GMT -5
I absolutely loved the poem i am like erosion i dont care about the flow as long as it speaks to the heart the way yours does! I wish i could write like u!!! I absolutely posotively love it!!!! ;D
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hehe