Down In My Mind

[TrappedDespair]

Nothings ever good enough,
A call with no reply,
So f*** my tired effort,
No tear drop I will cry,
You’ve brought me down,
So far I’m almost broken,
Down in my life,
So far I want to die,
You’ve torn my mended soul,
Into shattered pieces,
Burn holes in my eyes,
Leave without a sigh,
Nothings ever right,
But nothings ever wrong,
Been searching for something,
Forgot it’s been so long,
I’ve been dragged in this world,
Spit at so frequent,
I’ve been split at the seams,
No one seems to care,
I’ve been thrown to the corner,
Struggle to stay sane,
I try keep on fighting,
But there’s so much I can bare,
Cause I’ve been drown in this life,
Don’t think that I can fight this,
I’ve been down in my life,
Loss comes with a kiss…

[TrappedDespair]

So no one is going to take the time ever to tell me if they like my work or hate it or think I should burn it and start all over... I guess I'm just wasting my time posting thanks....-_-'

[Elisha]

personally, I love your work. what does it matter if nobody posts a reply, who gives a f**k what they think, it's not written for them, it's written for you. I think you are an exteamly talented person and you are not wasting your time sharing your work with the world. You are, however, wasting you time caring what the world thinks of it. You have a gift, and if that is not apparent to all of the mindless morons around you it should at least be apparent to you. This is talent here and if you burn it all and start all over it would be a waste. Keep all you work no matter what people tell you about it, because even if it isn't your best, it teaches you to do better. (not that you need to)

[TrappedDespair]

Thanks all I wanted was a reply I dont really care what people think about it I just like to know if people like it or not... which makes no sense but it does to me so... my "twitch" we shall call it is when no one tells me what they think it may contridict but I like knowing sorry if I seemed really pissy I guess it just came out more snottish then I wanted^_^

[Anonymous]

I liked it also. Nice work.

[unburntflame]

agree with Elisha. don't care whether people reply to your work or not, i've posted heaps of poems and noones commented. it doesn't mean they don't like it, nor does it mean that they hate it. and, like elisha said, poetry is all about ME (as in each person to themselves) and no matter how much you might say its not, it always will be, even if you've tried your best not to make it so. Don't care about comments, care that you have enough talent to write a poem as great as this one, but don't get snotty or big-headed for these sorts of comments either. hope this helps you.

flame

[TrappedDespair]

Thanks it helps its just I post to get replies when I dont feel like showing my friends hehehe nvm no complaining for me again!

[unburntflame]

You shouldn't post just for replies. I think that kinda defeats the purpose of the site. Its to share poetry and improve your skills as a writer. If you want critique on a piece, say so in the original post and I'm sure there's a few people on here who would be happy to help. I'm not often found on the Teen board, I usually post on General but the same rules apply there.

[tk4ever]

I loved it....I could actually relate.....to some extent

[~Erosion of the physco mind~]

same here!!!!! i could realate!!!!!!!BIG time!!!!!

[TrappedDespair]

Thank you for all your replies ;D

[Reality Bytes]

O.M.G. I can soooooooooooooo totally relate when it comes to my paents... but I think you mean boys

[TrappedDespair]

Actually I did right it about my parents! and of course the people in this small little school of mine...