10 Things

[unburntflame]

I hate the way you touch me, and the way you stroke my hair
I hate the way you smirk at me, and the way you stare
I hate your athletic body, and the fact its close to mine
I hate you so much it makes me sick, it even makes me rhyme.
I hate you cat-whiskered jeans, and your big blue eyes
I hate the fact you didn't call, even though its no surprise.
I hate the way you ignore me, and the way we never talk
I hate the way you joke about me, and the way you always walk
I hate that to the world we're small, but mostly
I hate the way I don't hate you, not even close, not even a little bit, not even at all.

[kawazu13]

i know jsut what you mean!
*ribbit*

[brokenlover]

i like the ring you added to it but its not original
good job tho

[Dead Man Walking]

Very well written. I loved the heart-felt intensity of this piece. Great job, Tj

[aj]

The subject is highly relatable though. I like that you're bold enough to share your feelings with us, flamey.
Anyway too much polish sometimes ruins the surface, eh?


-AJ

[unburntflame]

thanx chicksies, and guys of course!! luv yas all.....AJ - yep I hate polishing!!!!! I always thought that the original idea and writing is usually the best!

[XtearsX]

No offence to you in anyway but u got that poem from the movie 10 things i hate about u and u even used the same last sentence....i liked it tho its just not origional

[unburntflame]

yeah I know it's not original....even teachers in schools use it as a model to get kids to write poetry in class. but i like taking an idea and sort of modifying it to suit myself. there's nothing wrong with that, and if you think so, you're entitled to your opinion but don't mean i'm gonna listen to it.