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Hatred Jun 7, 2003 15:13:56 GMT -5

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Post by paxia on Jun 7, 2003 15:13:56 GMT -5

Stabbing blade of hate
Blood dripping down painfully
Slowly you kill me.

Ok pplz...this is my first time doing this kind of poetry...so I don't know if it's good or not, I would love some feedback, good or bad I don't care, I just want some opinions.

I know I may scare you and I will probably freak you out
But to me this is what living my life is all about
I'm not gonna try to be someone who isn't me
Don't you people realize, I'm living my life and I am free.

Jaysie poet poet/mod "If I had all the words, I would write myself out of here" Posts: 1,249	Hatred Jun 7, 2003 15:34:13 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Jaysie on Jun 7, 2003 15:34:13 GMT -5 You got it exactly right! Good job!
	CURBSIDE POETS

paxia been around the block Posts: 118	Hatred Jun 7, 2003 15:40:47 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by paxia on Jun 7, 2003 15:40:47 GMT -5 Thanx for the feedback!!! And for the compliment!!!
	I know I may scare you and I will probably freak you out But to me this is what living my life is all about I'm not gonna try to be someone who isn't me Don't you people realize, I'm living my life and I am free.

onemorething mod team Posts: 507	Hatred Jun 7, 2003 20:26:50 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by onemorething on Jun 7, 2003 20:26:50 GMT -5 great first try! -ken

Alexia mod team Posts: 1,026	Hatred Jun 7, 2003 20:43:31 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Alexia on Jun 7, 2003 20:43:31 GMT -5 Haiku is not my forte but it sounded good to me. Nice job! Alexia
	Wisdom is just a word. Knowing when to be wise is a power. Understanding when to share wisdom is a gift.

Post by paxia on Jun 7, 2003 15:13:56 GMT -5

Post by Jaysie on Jun 7, 2003 15:34:13 GMT -5

Post by paxia on Jun 7, 2003 15:40:47 GMT -5

Post by onemorething on Jun 7, 2003 20:26:50 GMT -5

Post by Alexia on Jun 7, 2003 20:43:31 GMT -5