fallingxroses
still rather new
you were the last good thing about this part of town.
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Post by fallingxroses on Aug 26, 2004 17:07:18 GMT -5
i don't think i have the knack of this yet  she laughs with the sky lets become one with the clouds free spirited souls. |
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_leash_
not so new anymore
shattered ocean
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Post by _leash_ on Sept 24, 2004 13:30:45 GMT -5
well, youve got the syllables right! all you really need to do with haiku is capture a moment(usually in nature) with strong words. as long as we can feel what you want us to, then it works! 
i like the first and last lines. keep it up. 
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