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Post by danielabella759 on Jul 17, 2004 10:57:52 GMT -5
One last tear for we
are troopers finding our way
to the morning sun...
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2003 12 15
Copyright © Daniela Maria Violin
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Post by melissa16 on Jul 17, 2004 11:30:52 GMT -5
this creates a beautiful picture! welcome to poets anon and i really like your work  cheers, Lissa |
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Post by danielabella759 on Jul 17, 2004 18:36:27 GMT -5
Thanks Melissa! |
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Post by _leash_ on Jul 21, 2004 13:49:36 GMT -5
"we" just doesnt work. are you asking this as a question, or are you trying to say "our troops are finding their way"? sorry for being so nit-picky..  |
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Post by danielabella759 on Jul 29, 2004 8:26:04 GMT -5
it's tear as in "rip"
not tear as in "cry"
troopers as in the army
hope you understand now _leash_!
read it as an entire sentence...
One last tear for we are troopers finding our way to the morning sun.
That's the effect I wanted to get across.
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