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Post by anticaged on Jun 2, 2003 22:19:41 GMT -5
I race through the forest alone in the dark scared where am I I noise a howl it sends a cold shiver down my spine a bolt of lightning in the distance I stop to catch my breath suddenly scream and another howl I take of again as fast as I'm able I come to clearing a young lady lay there covered in blood I race to her side then I see who she is she is my loved one a glass cold stare in her eyes and a look of horror on her mouth I go to hold her close but she vanishes and then I hear it a low buzzing it gets louder I get up and run but the sound follows it gets louder I run twigs tear at my skin calling for blood the buzz is nearly unbearable I trip I fall I start to roll and then... I sit up I'm in my bed and my alarm is blearing it was only a dream
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caged
shows promise
Smile and be happy... THAT'S AN ORDER
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Post by caged on Jun 3, 2003 18:27:40 GMT -5
very descriptive I like it
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Krystle
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Post by Krystle on Jun 3, 2003 18:35:59 GMT -5
i loved this poem i could nealy see every thing in the dream.
Krystle
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Tiny
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***Everyone deserves to be loved***
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Post by Tiny on Jun 3, 2003 19:43:59 GMT -5
absolutely beautiful i can see it it's it's WOW Tiny
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Post by WeepingDragon on Jun 3, 2003 19:48:07 GMT -5
gorgeous friend of mine. Sent with love from WeepingDragon
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Post by unburntflame on Jun 4, 2003 2:15:03 GMT -5
coolies! very descriptive, i was almost there!
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paxia
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Post by paxia on Jun 5, 2003 10:28:00 GMT -5
I agree with everybody else, it was quite descriptive...interesting concept...
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caged
shows promise
Smile and be happy... THAT'S AN ORDER
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Post by caged on Jun 5, 2003 20:12:21 GMT -5
this fasinates me it is so well writen and the imagery is great
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