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Post by millilou on Mar 30, 2003 20:30:52 GMT -5
My heart
is heavy now
as I hear the music
that announces the marching bride
coming down the aisle toward the waiting groom
who watches her with love filled eyes
never knowing my love
or the ache of
my heart |
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Post by engarde on Apr 3, 2003 4:35:30 GMT -5
Oh, this is a heartbreaker for sure! So what do you think of rictameters? Challenging huh?
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Post by millilou on Apr 3, 2003 10:45:20 GMT -5
Oh, yes. I do like this form! I've never tried it and am ashamed to say I've not heard of it 'til now. Did I get the form right? I tried to duplicate the form and meter of yours..are the first line and last line always the same?
I do so love these challenges. It gets me out of whatever writing rut I've fallen into. And I love the contests. I'm surprised many others on this site don't participate. Keep the challenges coming, and if I can figure the form out, I'll give anything a shot...at least once. MANY THANKS TO YOU for such an enjoyable
site for sharing our work.
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Post by engarde on Apr 7, 2003 5:01:21 GMT -5
Yes, you have the form right, I'm not sure it's a concrete rule but all the rictameters I've seen have ended with the same words that begun the poem.
I like how girlshapedgirl has been writing, the last word is opposite the start word...makes it interesting....
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Post by Char on Apr 8, 2003 17:58:27 GMT -5
I'm with you Milli!!! Some of these forms I've never even heard of, but it has been a fun challenge~out of the norm... By the way... Your poem is very well written, but it is so sad  It's bad enough when you are "left" for someone else, but it is a kinda "final" happening when they marry. Charlene  |
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Post by millilou on Apr 10, 2003 10:20:43 GMT -5
I know Charlene. This actually happened to a friend of mine. I would never show her this poem though, it would break her heart again. |
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It's bad enough when you are "left" for someone else, but it is a kinda "final" happening when they marry.