TrappedDespair
been around the block
How did it come to this...
Posts: 116
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Post by TrappedDespair on May 19, 2003 19:28:10 GMT -5
I don’t know how to tell you, I’m scared of what you’ll say, That empty feeling inside, Had become my way, Shatter through my world, With simple speech of tongue, It began to heal, The times that I’ve been stung, The wall that surrounds me weakens, I feel so exposed, To fearful to be near you, So worn to being closed, Walking in dream, Used to be alone, New feelings in my heart, Is this love you’ve shown.
(this is accually the first peom about love I've ever written... felt like trying something new... if you hate it or like it please share i appreciate all comments THANKS!)
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Post by unburntflame on May 21, 2003 23:59:54 GMT -5
thats a great write, especially if it's your first try!! keep going, i'm sure you'll develop some new skills to a high standard!! ;D
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Post by Elisha on May 22, 2003 13:21:54 GMT -5
How could anyone hate this? I think it's great. It's suprising that you havn't written anything about love before, that's the most common topic I can think of. My friend Jessie thinks it's over-done but I thnk people need all the love they can get in this world because it isn't as easy to find as some people think
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TrappedDespair
been around the block
How did it come to this...
Posts: 116
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Post by TrappedDespair on May 22, 2003 17:14:45 GMT -5
Thank you for your comments. I never wrote about love before cause I hadn't really ever experienced love before... still haven't. I actually got this poem from my best friend type of love. Maybe I'll write more of them when I love someone romantically.
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