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TrappedDespair
been around the block

How did it come to this...

Posts: 116

Torn Apart May 17, 2003 13:58:39 GMT -5

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Post by TrappedDespair on May 17, 2003 13:58:39 GMT -5

I make mistakes I bleed inside,
I push away the pain I hide,
You see me smile but it’s all a lie,
If you asked you could see me cry,
I mask it all you’ll never know,
Until away my life I throw,
You’ll gasp pretend it was all so new,
You’ll never admit what you put me through,
Just because I choose to be,
What I am not what you see,
This torture torment unfair unjust,
The way so easily you broke your trust,
No friend’s just enemies through all the years,
Life is stained by bloody tears.

The fever, the focus.
The reasons that I had to believe
you weren't too hard to sell.
Die young and save yourself.
The tickle, the taste of...
It used to be the reason I breathed
but now it's choking me up.
Die young and save yourself.

Elisha
poet

Posts: 297

Torn Apart May 17, 2003 20:25:02 GMT -5

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Post by Elisha on May 17, 2003 20:25:02 GMT -5

This poem is so amazing. It took my breath away when I read it. I like it so much, you can't even imagine. Seriously, you may think you can but no. There is no way anyone can get just how good I think this is. You need to hire an airplane guy to write this in the sky so everyone can read it.

When the night is almost over, just before the moon goes down
The wings of waking angels echo softly all around

TrappedDespair been around the block How did it come to this... Posts: 116	Torn Apart May 17, 2003 21:26:15 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by TrappedDespair on May 17, 2003 21:26:15 GMT -5 THANK U THANK U THANK U! I'm a really big fan of your poems and u saying that about mine made me very happy! THANK U!
	The fever, the focus. The reasons that I had to believe you weren't too hard to sell. Die young and save yourself. The tickle, the taste of... It used to be the reason I breathed but now it's choking me up. Die young and save yourself.

JamesB just a little green Posts: 64	Torn Apart May 18, 2003 23:09:23 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by JamesB on May 18, 2003 23:09:23 GMT -5 I agree, great poem!! Keep it up! -James p.s. it flows well!
	"Clothes make the man, naked people have little or no influence upon society" -Mark Twain

TrappedDespair been around the block How did it come to this... Posts: 116	Torn Apart May 19, 2003 18:52:45 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by TrappedDespair on May 19, 2003 18:52:45 GMT -5 Thank you!
	The fever, the focus. The reasons that I had to believe you weren't too hard to sell. Die young and save yourself. The tickle, the taste of... It used to be the reason I breathed but now it's choking me up. Die young and save yourself.

unburntflame poet poet/mod Life will not kill the dream I dream. Posts: 711	Torn Apart May 22, 2003 19:59:01 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by unburntflame on May 22, 2003 19:59:01 GMT -5 well done, gr8 write!!! keep it up!!!!
	I can't believe that someone like you would just happen and not be created.

TrappedDespair been around the block How did it come to this... Posts: 116	Torn Apart May 23, 2003 17:35:26 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by TrappedDespair on May 23, 2003 17:35:26 GMT -5 Thank you also!
	The fever, the focus. The reasons that I had to believe you weren't too hard to sell. Die young and save yourself. The tickle, the taste of... It used to be the reason I breathed but now it's choking me up. Die young and save yourself.

Restless mod team Posts: 579	Torn Apart May 24, 2003 10:08:35 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Restless on May 24, 2003 10:08:35 GMT -5 Nice job!!!!!
	"Being grown up isn't half as fun as growing up.....these are the best days of our lives. The only thing that matters is just following your heart, and eventually you will get it right" -Ataris-

Post by TrappedDespair on May 17, 2003 13:58:39 GMT -5

Post by Elisha on May 17, 2003 20:25:02 GMT -5

Post by TrappedDespair on May 17, 2003 21:26:15 GMT -5

Post by JamesB on May 18, 2003 23:09:23 GMT -5

Post by TrappedDespair on May 19, 2003 18:52:45 GMT -5

Post by unburntflame on May 22, 2003 19:59:01 GMT -5

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Post by Restless on May 24, 2003 10:08:35 GMT -5