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Post by Elisha on May 14, 2003 17:51:24 GMT -5
I made you think I loved you
I made you think I cared
I never meant to hurt you
I should have been prepared
Maybe you believed me
Maybe I believed me too
Cuz all the lies a told you
Began to seem so true
I wanted you like me
I wanted you to see
How come I never noticed
What was such a part of me
I know I didn't hurt you
Because you never cared
I made myself a fool for you
Pretending love was there
And now I never speak to you
I only pass the time
With teardrops on my pillowcase
And snowflakes on my mind.
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JamesB
just a little green
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Post by JamesB on May 14, 2003 21:05:10 GMT -5
Another very interesting one Elisha! I like the ending couplet, and you also threw in a big twist. Keep it up!
-James
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Post by rissed on May 14, 2003 23:23:15 GMT -5
hey
i like that poem. it rules. i like the way it actually has graphic detail.
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gooba
been around the block
From your loving neighbourhood gooba!!!!
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Post by gooba on May 15, 2003 1:45:09 GMT -5
i love the poem it rox absolutely love it
keep it up
Gooba
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Post by heatherzafeather on May 16, 2003 22:45:35 GMT -5
i like the poem but i don't understand he part abotu snowflakes. it says nothing about snow or cold or wnter exept that one part. but cool poem.
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Post by Elisha on May 17, 2003 20:21:00 GMT -5
No, it never says anything about cold or winter because it's not about cold or winter. The guy's last name was snow so snowflakes on my mind, get it now?
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Post by unburntflame on May 22, 2003 0:03:15 GMT -5
wow, i really loved that. i can totally absolutely 100% relate and i was going to email that to a friend but it didn't quite fit what happened, as that was kinda what he did to me......but never mind. and you don't have to explain your poems if you don't want to. i agree with JamesB, the ending couplet made the poem - wouldn'tve been the same without it!!  |
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Post by Restless on May 24, 2003 10:10:53 GMT -5
Nice job.........something I can really relate to! I really enjoyed this one!!!! Keep up the great writes!!
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lilphotogal
still rather new
...and each seperate dying ember wroght it's ghost upon the floor
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Post by lilphotogal on May 28, 2003 20:45:58 GMT -5
Hey Elisha, I love the poem. I really like the couplet at the end.
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Post by Elisha on May 28, 2003 21:18:48 GMT -5
Thanks, I never thought this would get so much feedback when I put this on here. I'm glad though. I love you guys, Elisha
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gooba
been around the block
From your loving neighbourhood gooba!!!!
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Post by gooba on May 28, 2003 23:19:32 GMT -5
im still tryin to get over it this one rocx i love it so much great job elisha.
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Tiny
been around the block
***Everyone deserves to be loved***
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Post by Tiny on May 28, 2003 23:31:23 GMT -5
 absolutely beautiful i think a lot of people could relate to this keep it up Tiny 
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kawazu13
been around the block
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Post by kawazu13 on May 29, 2003 21:36:33 GMT -5
greatgreatgreat! i lovelovelove it!
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