TrappedDespair
been around the block
How did it come to this...
Posts: 116
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Insane
May 4, 2003 15:08:29 GMT -5
Post by TrappedDespair on May 4, 2003 15:08:29 GMT -5
Life, broken dreams,
Suicide, hollow screams,
Laziness, hanging pain,
Silently I am insane.
Can some one please tell me how this one is im thinking about entering it in a compitition. Thanks for all your input!
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caged
shows promise
Smile and be happy... THAT'S AN ORDER
Posts: 90
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Insane
May 4, 2003 20:19:41 GMT -5
Post by caged on May 4, 2003 20:19:41 GMT -5
It's really good it's short, to the point, and well written you should really put it in a comp  |
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Insane
May 5, 2003 22:17:01 GMT -5
Post by Maryann22 on May 5, 2003 22:17:01 GMT -5
great powerful poem in such short words. Maryann22
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Tiny
been around the block
***Everyone deserves to be loved***
Posts: 100
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Insane
May 6, 2003 0:19:39 GMT -5
Post by Tiny on May 6, 2003 0:19:39 GMT -5
 i'm insane too to being serious though i agree with my good friend Caged Tiny 
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gooba
been around the block
From your loving neighbourhood gooba!!!!
Posts: 102
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Insane
May 6, 2003 4:24:37 GMT -5
Post by gooba on May 6, 2003 4:24:37 GMT -5
its great i like it cos its short easy to read and cuts to the chase
you should defiently enter it
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Insane
May 23, 2003 23:20:25 GMT -5
Post by Elisha on May 23, 2003 23:20:25 GMT -5
It's awesome, you should definately enter it. There's so much power packed into those four lines. It's absoulutely amazing. I hope I spelled that right, absoulutely. Among my millions of other flaws, I'm not the best speller n the world. But anyway back to the poem, if you don't enter that thing I'm going to be very angry with you. And I bet some others will be too. Luv ya, Elisha
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