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Post by Elisha on Apr 25, 2003 13:02:15 GMT -5
How far could this go How long did you know How come it makes no sense to me These games you put me through? How come I couldn't see How wrong you were for me How could someone like me Ever learn to care for you? Everything went wrong Knew it all along Something made me overlook The stupid things you do. You're sleeping by yourself Don't want nobody else Sorry but there's nobody To take the blame but you. Call me on the phone Am I home alone Can you please drop by so We can try and work it out? Don't even tell you bye Just say go fu**ing die Cause now I finally learned to see What you were all about.
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Post by Maryann22 on May 6, 2003 23:46:22 GMT -5
I have to say that I think this one needs just alittle bit of work. it just doesn't flow like most of your poems do. Maryann22
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Post by Elisha on May 8, 2003 9:35:57 GMT -5
no, it doesn't. I had some trouble writing this one, I got the first four lines in my head and just went on it. That's the best way to do it I guess, but it doesn't always turn out like I meant for it too.
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