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Post by holdensbroallie on Jul 28, 2012 16:16:04 GMT -5
Prometheus
Electricity travels my skin;
Pace forth and back and there again.
Sweat taunts the shiver soon to come;
Flip the light again from off to on.
Pray to god asking for mercy;
Frustration builds, “Stop it you pussy.”
Body aches prolong their visit;
Vomit and shit with no pot to piss in.
Minutes tick by like dessert hours;
I ponder the cure over which I have no power.
Physical ills pair with my mind;
Amnesia leaves hope nowhere to find.
I am in hell,
My hands tremor and my body quivers;
I am Prometheus,
But f*** the birds, I’ll eat my own liver.
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TKei
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Post by TKei on Jul 28, 2012 23:35:30 GMT -5
If I may ask, why did you choose this title? I see very little relevance to the myth of Prometheus, so I'm left to wonder what the significance of the title is.
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Post by holdensbroallie on Jul 31, 2012 18:22:42 GMT -5
www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC1294986/pdf/jrsocmed00078-0036.pdfCheck out that link which talks about Prometheus and the liver. Also, the last line - which I didn't realize there wasn't cursing on this site - says F*CK the birds, I'll eat my own liver. And I don't want to translate my poem into a literal essay, that would sort of take away from the point of writing poetically, but the bulk of the poem relates to something that, like Prometheus' curse, is destructive of the liver. There are a few layers of why the speaker of the poem relates to Prometheus as presented in mythology (or I tried to do that anyway). It is certainly possible that the poem itself is not successful in sending the message intended. I am unquestionably an amateur. But at least in terms of intention, I wanted to illustrate a speaker who has much in common with Prometheus. As a side note, I wrote this a few years back, long before the new Alien prequel(?) was in the social dialogue, so it certainly has nothing to do with that. Thanks for the response though! I was hesitant to even put these up on this pretty anonymous site. 
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TKei
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Post by TKei on Jul 31, 2012 22:12:25 GMT -5
A lesser-known myth of Prometheus. Interesting. I only ever learned of the more prominent myths a couple of years go. I never took the time to read up on others.
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Post by water4545 on Oct 16, 2012 9:54:49 GMT -5
awesome write. I dig it. especially the last line.
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TKei
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Post by TKei on Oct 16, 2012 18:07:20 GMT -5
I can't believe it took me this long to figure out your name... "holdensbroallie"
Holden's Bro(ther) Allie. I admire that, really. The Catcher in the Rye is probably my favorite novel. I noticed the Holden part, but it took me until just now to figure out the rest of the name. Awesome, man. Awesome.
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