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Post by Devi145 on Apr 29, 2003 18:48:31 GMT -5
Man, im so tired. Something inside me needs to be rewired, or I should be retired. No one told me that this required...strength, putting my thoughts so far away in length! It’s making me feel horrible! Everything is looking deplorable. Things in my life are so exhausting, criss crossing, a mind boggle... set off with an effective toggle, leaving me behind restless. I mean look at this mess! All tattered and torn, everyone has been sent into a morn, scorned, and swore they were warned!!! Feeling so helpless over here, and now its turned into a fear. My mind is no longer the worry, things in life seem to be getting so blurry, if I hurried...do you think I'd catch up in time before I was buried? Now its time for me to sleep, to pass the time in this wondrous deep heap.... But would I dare to leap? If in my dream I came upon a jagged steep? My bodies will power sadly to seep, laying down to weep...if my thoughts were the problem in the first place, what would happen if our world was in a race? A fast heavy pace, no grace or embrace...no time to climb. Things would be like a mime...still silent and distant, so funny to see but persistent...I'll never cease, trying to find in this world some peace, for the things that have left a huge crease.
This is my poem I wrote in the middle of the night when I couldn't sleep.
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Post by RiotGirl on Apr 29, 2003 19:39:25 GMT -5
it sounds kind of like a rap ;D. Was it tricky finding so many words that rhymed?
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Post by Devi145 on Apr 29, 2003 19:45:20 GMT -5
Actually, no lol.. It only took about half an hour to come up with, I was sleepless and a random thought ran through my mind, and I kept adding onto it hoping it made since. Yea it is kind of, but I like the flow of it. Liz aka. Dev
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Post by rissed on Apr 29, 2003 23:38:29 GMT -5
wicked poem. i like it allot!
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Post by ShInE on Apr 30, 2003 7:05:05 GMT -5
i really liked this...love your style! hope you have a few more sleepless nights
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Post by Devi145 on Apr 30, 2003 12:27:14 GMT -5
Wha!? Maybe I should just be an insomniac just for yas, and then my eyes will be glowing red and I'll turn into some kinda sleepless zombie! Nah, kidding.. lol Thanks everyone, I'm already working on a new one, the power of being sick and staying home from school, hehe ;D I'll post it in a little bit.....
Liz
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