Dear Someone

Elisha
poet

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Dear Someone Apr 28, 2003 22:21:05 GMT -5

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Post by Elisha on Apr 28, 2003 22:21:05 GMT -5

Dear Someone are you out there
Dear Someone can you hear
Dear Someone I can't stop myself
I'm gonna disappear
Dear Someone hey it's raining
Dear Someone hey I'm cold
Dear Someone feeling dizzy
Going to explode
Dear Someone can you find me
Dear Someone can you see
Dear Someone watch me put an end
To all this misery
Dear Someone what's this liquid
Dear Someone oozing red
Guess Someone should have listened to
The words I never said

When the night is almost over, just before the moon goes down
The wings of waking angels echo softly all around

RiotGirl shows promise shalom Posts: 86	Dear Someone Apr 29, 2003 22:03:06 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by RiotGirl on Apr 29, 2003 22:03:06 GMT -5 Repetition can be so powerful. I love how it picks up at the end and really goes out with a bang. The last two lines are just stupendous. <--(bringing out the big guns with that word aren't we rg?) . Well done. ^RG>

rissed poet you say i'm a witch like it's a bad thing! Posts: 234	Dear Someone Apr 29, 2003 23:36:24 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by rissed on Apr 29, 2003 23:36:24 GMT -5 i love this poem so much. it's almost brought on tears. it stirred up some stuff, oh well it's beautiful. definitely one of your best.
	it's wise to look ahead, but foolish to see further than you can look.

Maryann22 poet/Gmod Posts: 721	Dear Someone May 6, 2003 23:08:39 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Maryann22 on May 6, 2003 23:08:39 GMT -5 I loved this poem so much power in it. Maryann22

Post by Elisha on Apr 28, 2003 22:21:05 GMT -5

Post by RiotGirl on Apr 29, 2003 22:03:06 GMT -5

Post by rissed on Apr 29, 2003 23:36:24 GMT -5

Post by Maryann22 on May 6, 2003 23:08:39 GMT -5