Ride on

[Yellie]

They ride through the braking oil on the sky,
their run echoing of thundering hooves,
Stirring white and silver fumes, and
Piercing the air with silver manes.

Ride on,
Hollow riders,
ride on.

Hollow white horses, fight on the sky
thunder and lightening underlining silhouettes of bended trees,
transcending the fumes of death at dawn,
falling like snow,
through shades of old mosaics
and memories from the window,
on to the paper in forms of ink.

Ride on
Hollow riders
ride on

Wild white horses,
ride safe and fast,
through the slumbering hills and
velvet cathedrals,
under Cascading stars and Shredded
clouds,
lined with madness,
and my memories of love.

Ride on
hollow riders
ride on.

[Yellie]

This was my first try at this poem, I have changed it a lot since...the new version is in contest week three, what do you think of the changes?

[Maryann22]

i really like it

[SwEeTdReAmS]

i like it nice job